©Rochelle Wisoff
Listening to the sound of waves as they touched my feet, I wish I could chase them. I wish I could hold water in my hands without dropping it.
Is it just me or does everyone else gets amazed by the nature and how it is so alluring and just incredibly beautiful?
When I thought I had seen all of it and embraced it. When I thought it couldn’t get any more breathtaking…
I tilted my face towards the clouds covering the sky. Tiny droplets touched my face and felt like they washed away every sin I had ever done.
(100 words)
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This story is written for the Friday Fictioneers, a writing challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
The task of the challenge is to write a story: beginning, middle, and end, in 100 words or less. Please read and share your thoughts about my story in the comment section.
P.S-Feel free to point out any mistake you find and help me improve. 🙂
I remember as a child trying to hold water in my hands. Didn’t matter how tightly I clasped them!
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I still try it and fail every time but I get equally amazed. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. 🙂
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I used to do that too!
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Captures the magical aspect of water, and the reviving effect. Well done.
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Thank you so much Iain 🙂
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Beautiful flow of the words, nicely done.
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Thank you so much 😊 Means a lot to me. 😊
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“Though your sins are as scarlet, They will be as white as snow; Though they are red like crimson, They will be like wool.” -Isaiah 1:18
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Beautiful words 😍
Thank you so much for reading and commenting 😊
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Dear Vaidehi,
Touching and vivid. I could feel the water droplets on my face and cool breeze through my hair. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much for such a nice comment Rochelle 🙂 You always inspire me.
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Thank you, Vaidehi. I hope my story inspires you as well. 😉
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It does. Beautifully written. Great characterisation 🙂
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This took me to a lovely place, although nature is amazing, it can also be terrifying.
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I agree. It’s how you see it and depends on things happening around you.
Thanks for reading and commenting 😊
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Just lovely. Thank you Vaidehi.
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I’m glad you liked it. Thank you so much for reading and commenting 😊
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Pleasure. Look forward to reading more Vaidehi.
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That was a sweet story, and being a nature-lover myself, it resonated.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting Madison. 😊
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Nature is the most majestic of all wonders… and your character is drunk on her magic.
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She is indeed.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting Magaly 😊
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A perfect moment in nature can leave our souls feeling cleansed.
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True. Nature does wonders.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting Rommy 😊
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That was truly lovely… Who has not tried to hold water in their hands?
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Everyone has but no one talks about these little beautiful things which actually matter.
Thanks for reading and commenting Dale 😊
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That was just downright awesomely beautiful! 🙂 A much needed reminder after the storms that not all is lost. Look up! Look up! the littlest of the children said Wednesday after the storm. We did, and the sky was the most beautiful blue with powder puff clouds.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting 🙂
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This is lovely. Natures beauty surrounds us if we keep our hearts open to see.
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True, we just need to see.
Thanks for reading and commenting 😊
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Just one word is needed to describe this story: Awesome! 🙂
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Thank you so much I’m glad you found it awesome. 🙂
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It really is. 🙂
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Thanks 😊
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This is lovely. Awestruck by Nature’s glory. Good writing, Vaidehi.
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Thank you Neel.
I’m glad you liked it 😊
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Wonderful post.
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Thank you so much Sumit. 😊
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😋
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I enjoyed the “tiny” reference as it gave a gentleness to the story. Rain, A gift from heaven; soothes both parched lips and parched souls alike. Peace
-goroyboy
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Wonderfully put.. 😍
Thank you. 😊
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